Adrian, Alive and Feeling Good!, 3pts
Brother Edmund, what you don't see won't hurt you, 2pts
Treesnifer, Confusion at the end of the Wirld, 1pts
Treesnifer, I really like the idea you were trying for, but I think you had just a little too much going on. The beginning sounds like a full military retreat through a magical thunderstorm, where everyone is trying to make it to a distant portal mirage on the other side. Actually, it reminds me of certain scenes in Glen Cook's Black Company. I think the story could have been very different in a fantasy setting. Still, I enjoyed it
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Brother Edmund, once again, you produce a solid and intriguing story. I didn't expect the inquisition at the end, this time. Quite a ploy to prove someone's guilt. But who am I to question the ways of the Inquisition.
Adrian, I contemplated on your story again to see how it stacked up against the competition. The past few times you have entered, I have voted you as my first choice. There is just something in the way you write. Within a thousand words, I feel a strong bond with your characters. I am concerned about their fate, their achievements, and their woes that are often tied to the theme of your works. I think you did it again this time, cause I'm voting you first.
Good stories from everyone, hope to see you guys in next month's contest.
Brother Edmund, what you don't see won't hurt you, 2pts
Treesnifer, Confusion at the end of the Wirld, 1pts
Treesnifer, I really like the idea you were trying for, but I think you had just a little too much going on. The beginning sounds like a full military retreat through a magical thunderstorm, where everyone is trying to make it to a distant portal mirage on the other side. Actually, it reminds me of certain scenes in Glen Cook's Black Company. I think the story could have been very different in a fantasy setting. Still, I enjoyed it
.Brother Edmund, once again, you produce a solid and intriguing story. I didn't expect the inquisition at the end, this time
. Quite a ploy to prove someone's guilt. But who am I to question the ways of the Inquisition.Adrian, I contemplated on your story again to see how it stacked up against the competition. The past few times you have entered, I have voted you as my first choice. There is just something in the way you write. Within a thousand words, I feel a strong bond with your characters. I am concerned about their fate, their achievements, and their woes that are often tied to the theme of your works. I think you did it again this time, cause I'm voting you first.
Good stories from everyone, hope to see you guys in next month's contest
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