yea, I know WIP........ I think im gonna buy mecherite red as foundationDoesn't look too bad. I would work on the following:
1. get some definition (highlights, washes etc) on the metal. looks way too clean and shiny and flat, to be honest.
2. there is a lot of black showing through on the red areas. always try and get an opaque covering of red over black, or work from a brown basecoat on the areas you want to do red.
3. an extreme edge highlight generally doesn't need any more than a tiny, tiiiiiny line of the highlight colour. you've gone a bit overboard there, methinks (although I don't have a reference model on me to compare to your work with the extra large size).
If you want your edge highlights to look a little bit better, I would suggest you use a 1:1 mix of your highlight colour and your regular colour in the areas you've done as your 'edge highlight' and then do an extreme edge highlight (like I talked about before) of your highlight colour on the photo.
Sorry if that makes no sense, I'm kind of tired at the moment.
4. I think that the gold could be dirtied up a little - add some really heavy washes of badab brown + baal red on the gold areas, and it'll make for a blood-soaked, corroded look.
The burn markings on the end of the plasma pistol look good though.
and of course, he needs basing, as usual. But this is a good start.