Lucius
Good
lord
terminator armour
combi melta
slaanesh
blissgiver
Pretty much without a place, instead i'd go with a lash sorceror
10x chosen
champion
pair/lightning claws
lascannon
meltabombs
3x power weapons
As Zanden said go with 6man melta choosen, or 3 meltas/2 flamers for take all comers
noise marines x10
champion
doom siren
power weapon. X2
9x sonic blasters
blast master
Again Zanden's advice is solid, these squads are a mess. Downgrade them to 6man (slaanesh's sacred number) and try to specialize every squad for a pourpose (see advice below)
5x raptors
champion
pair/lightning claws
plasma pistol
slaanesh
2x flamers
Take off plasma pistol, they need more bodies, 6man fluffwise, but i suggest at least 8
2x spawn
take em off, they have no place in there
2x obliterators
Good, try to go with another squad like this.
vindicator
dirge casters
demonic possession
havoc launcher
Again as Zanden said it needs only DP
1990
what does anyone think of this list will it do well
Well, you only need to focus better on your troop squads, they are the core of the army and now in 5th ed they gets more importance since only scoring units can take objectives. With that being said let's talk about NMs sqads, i assume you whant to go with the fluff so every squad should be 6man or a multiple of 6 (but usually i prefer 8man in CC units) i suggest something like:
6 NMs
-2 SonicB, Champ w/Doom Siren, Power Fist, Personal Icon
-Rhino
225 pts
CC units, they go take/steal obj, you need at least 3 of these squads in a 2000pts game, only 2 SonicB because only 2 man can fire out of the rhino and to keep the squad cheap.
6 NMs
-3 SonicB, Blastmaster
-Rhino
210 pts
Cheap Sit-at-home units, great for obj holding and for some long range firepower.
With all these changes you should be able to go with: 2 HQs, 1MeltaChoosen, 4NMs squads (3 CC, 1 camper squad), 1Raptors, 2x2Oblits, 1Vindie. This list is way more flexible than your first, and you should do well against a lot of armies (not kitted for competitive plays anyway)
Hope this helps, good luck!