It looks decent, but the LRC is a massive rock unit that your army pretty much hinges on. You need support to keep it from getting wrecked or blocked up.
Dakka Preds are excellent for this role, as are Rhinos, Dreads and Speeders. The 2nd unit of Termies doesn't really fit considering everything else is mechanized so I'd drop them for good support like MM/HF or TLAC/ML Dreads, MM/HF Speeders, or go the hybrid route and take CML DW squads to support your advance at range.
Dakka Preds are excellent for this role, as are Rhinos, Dreads and Speeders. The 2nd unit of Termies doesn't really fit considering everything else is mechanized so I'd drop them for good support like MM/HF or TLAC/ML Dreads, MM/HF Speeders, or go the hybrid route and take CML DW squads to support your advance at range.
