thank you for some ideas,and the army list is legal becasue emperor's chamipon is not a HQ he dosent take a slot.And i well be takeing off the thudder hammer and storm sheild's and just add lighting clawsWell a couple things first... is it a combined armies list and match? if it is then you are doing good but if not and its only one army match then no, your army is not legal. Secondly, you need a whole lot more anti tank for your list is lacking in it. put a powerfist in your initiate squads and add some neophytes for extra wounds. also a chaplain be it Rec or MoS that has a command squad can have a holy relic and keep that close to your regular initiate squads can really put the hurt on once revealed. also i would add some dreads in drop pods for they are really worth there points and are versatile. Also note on black templars, there thunder hammer termies are bad compared to regular vanilla termies because the BT codex states that they only get the invul save from the storm shield in close combat, but assault termies with lightning claws with furious charge can really deal damage cause they reroll to hits and to wounds and hit at S5 I5!
Allso this list is to fight Blood angels,so i am not worryed about geting shot at,it well be a deathmach game to nothing eles.