I really like that story concept Zion, though that governor made a politically poor choice I think!

I think we all should have stuck to Space Marines verses Space marines, blah, blah!

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Thanks but how often do governors in 40k make good choices? I can think of one I know of who did in an Iron Snakes story and that's it.

Also to be fair Dar did bang his wife. So regardless the good detective had been in the wrong too.

Well I know that at least one of our friends on this site has made it through to the next round.
We wish him all the best.
Hopefully we will have a new BL author on the circuit soon who comes from here on Heresy Online! :ok:

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So I feel less bad about quality now that I've gotten other eyes on it, and see my mistakes were not picking something more attention grabbing out of the writing and being too close ended on where the story should go.

So those are my tips to everyone else for next year too: pick something that hooks the reader and makes them wonder how the character got into that situation and how they're getting out of it and when writing your pitch, if they're not looking for complete stories then only hit some major points on what you're trying to do with the story but don't pitch the ending with it.

I think you have nailed it on the head.
Maybe next year perhaps?

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