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REVENGE AND REDEMPTION
And as if the Grey Knights words had summoned them, a large group of Tzeentch Flamers materialized in front of the small group of Imperial warriors, the grotesque deamons hurling fireballs into the organized ranks of the Inquisitional Shock Troopers, immolating two before the troopers returned fire, their hell guns ripping into the daemons and one of the shock troops let out a roaring burst of promethium flames from his flamer, returning the favor done to their comrades.
But the Flamers had barely just fallen before another, larger, group of the warp entities appeared unleashing more multicoloured flame at the brave humans, but none of the flames reached the shock troops, the whole entire salvo had halted in mid-air and disappeared, but the daemons had little time to wonder at this development before the two Grey Knights tore through their ranks like silvered grey hurricanes, bits of Tzeentch daemon flew everywhere
and the Shock troops and Errand were covered in droplets of thick, orange blood, which strongly smelled of promethium.
When the last Flamer fell, the two Grey Knights walked a ways away from the rest of the group and started having a conversation, while the two space marines conversed the Shock trooper's sergeant, a gruff man named Igor, ordered his men to rest, and cleanse their weapons armor of the Flamers blood, as the men finished their rites of purification, and their weapons and armor were clean, the vox carried by the coms officer crackled and sputtered to life, "Squad Alpha Romeo Charlie, come in, locstat, over"
Picking up the handset of the vox Igor replied, "Hq, this is squad Alpha Romeo Charlie, Locstat, we have engaged and defeated two groups of enemies, we have two dead and some with minor burns,over"
"Copy that, astropaths report traitor space marines-planet side, all remaining forces ready to deploy, out"
Returning the headset back to it's holder Igor straightened and walked over to the two Grey Knights and saluted each in turn and said, "Sir, HQ has confirmed traitor space marines are on planet, and all the remaining forces left at Hq are ready to deploy, sir"
Bannex turned to the sergeant and said, "Thank you sergeant, call in a thunderhawk, we are returning to the base"
Half an hour later a Thunderhawk could be seen over the horizon, flying low towards them until it reached them and landed, it's rear hatch slamming down and the Shock Troopers walking up it, the clank of their steel capped boots was highly audible, even with the low whine of the engines, but when the Grey knights started walking up the ramp it seemed lightning was striking for each step.
But one everybody was on-board the craft started to shake as the engines worked to lift the Thunderhawks bulk off the ground, but after a while the shuddering stopped and Errand felt weightless and turning to Bannex he started to ask, "Wher-"
"In space, we are going to my ship the Angel's Fortune
were you will begin your journey to revenge and redemption"..............