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post #1 of 3 (permalink) Old 06-17-10, 06:26 AM Thread Starter
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Finished: Too Much Love Will Kill You (working title), an original fiction novel. Working on: Second draft of Too Much Love, and the first draft of A Winter's Tale (working title).

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Haven't had a chance to read it yet (on vacation and the wife hardly lets me check the website much less read...yes I'm a bitch) but my primary concern after looking at it is the blocks-o-text. I'd try to add spaces between each separate paragraph for ease of reading. You did it some... just not quite enough. Don't worry... I will read it in the coming week or so (once I get back to the real world).


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Great. Feel free to check out my other short, "It Caused An Effect"

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