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Default Raven Chronicles Parts 1 - 4

I wrote these stories a while back and had editted them a bit now. i am currently writing the 5th and final part so i will post that as a W.I.P in a different thread.


As The Raven Dies PT1 Raven Chronicles

The sun was setting on the battered field and the sound of gun fire had died down once more. I personally didn’t like the silence on the battle field, it was eerie and caused a sense of false security in my men.

”Calm Down Persius! Its not over yet” I shouted at the overzealous Trooper.

I pulled out my chain sword and readied my Bolt Pistol, Enigmus my trusted blade that has carried me through countless victories, the metal now worn and darkened through an age of blood and conflict and the hilt’s cloth now reddened with death, each tip of each blade that ran up the edge of Enigmus was perfectly crafted and customised to me. It was a gift to me upon my ascension to Brother Captain, crafted on Deliverance in the fires of darkness. I re-sheathed my blade and inspected my Bolt Pistol, the black carapace covering the upper half of my gun was dusted with the pestilent death of countless victims and the brazened metal near its extinction, I would soon need to take it to the chapter armoury for repairs. I pulled my helmet from my side and placed it over my head, the eyes gleaming red, as if enraged by the silence and the black beak damaged from a previous encounter, the general state of my armour was good though and suitable once more to take on the enemies of the emperor.

A bright green light beamed through Predator Ultimatum and in the midst of the explosion it gave a sublime lighting that re lit the scarred battle field, Craters even 50 feet or so and the wreckage of several chapter brothers sarcophagus’ the most outstanding of our warriors felled by a robotic beast.

”READY BROTHERS!!!” I Screamed at my squad. A barrage of chain swords flaring up and mighty battle roars gave me my answer. The unison of my words echoed through every captain and sergeant in the unit.

I turned on my jump pack as did my battle brothers and inferno of flames erupted out of the vents jetting us into the midst of the battle. As we were jetting to our foes there numbers appeared more than before, the felled Necrons just standing back up were we had slain them. I was ready for almost anything.

Flurries of Gauss lit up the night sky and pierced the chest plates of our brothers, there bodies turning to nothing as the flux’s of gauss rendered there flesh into ash. A monotone blast of voices laughing in the face of the emperor gave me an internal rage that could even be described as anything but upon my charge I gave a relentless and furious charge, striking down from the skies hitting the phalanx of warriors in the middles, before I threw my first blow my squad dropped several Melta-Bombs upon the enemies the intense heat burning there living metal as if it were nothing more than paper. We landed my first blow with Enigmus ripped straight through the face of a warrior, internal liquids spewing everywhere catching alight as it hit the smouldering heat from the melta-bomb inferno. I ducked as a warrior lifted his weapon up and flung it down with force, his body a dark steel colour and his eyes filled with death and glowing a fluorescent green. I tripped and rolled over only to have another attempt on me by the same warrior he did the same manoeuvre lifting his blade up and striking down but this time he made a fatal error, catching his blade in the ground I revved my blade and thrust it into the chest of the Robotic monster, likes its comrades it spewed a liquid that ignited upon hitting another flame. Me and my men were now surrounded by piles of metal corpses and a wall of enraging flame glowing a faint green from the living metal burning within it.

”Victory is ours Captain!” Said Persius as he rose from his final kill, always premature on his celebrations was Persius although a good soldier and a fine brother to accompany me into combat.

Although as the words pondered my head whether or not to salute victory as well a strong beamed pierced the wall of flames and tore Persius armour in half, leaving no chance of survival the armour penetrating capabilities of this weapon were not that of the normal gauss weaponry. The ground ached with sorrow as the Necron lord and his retinue of lifeless body guards or as name by the Imperium Pariahs walked through the wall of fire, a gaze of death felled 2 more of my squad the cowered in fear and as they did so the Pariahs struck them with the Blades of the C’tan, the War scythes of death pulled life away from my battle brothers. I roared In a fit of rage and Revved up Enigmus slashing at the lifeless embodiment of evil, the blades tearing through the pariahs chests causing fatal blows, giving them nothing more to hide behind I pulled up my bolt gun and grouped 3 or 4 shots into the open chest cavity of the pariah felling him with a splatter of blood. My remaining brothers Orion and Garrus did the same an in doing so we felled the retinue of Pariahs leaving only the Deceitful bringer of death standing on his pedestal of corpses, He laughed in the face of danger and his robotic voice sent shivers down my spine. We surrounded him and he stood there not flinching not even moving to avoid what was to come. He stared at me with lifeless eyes and pierced even my heart, I gulped down my fear and was ready for anything. Orion and Garrus took up position at my side and as the Platinum Lord slowly took steps towards us we revved up our blades and cocked our pistols.

”Do not falter brothers” I whispered to only the strongest of my warriors.

The Necron lords eyes grew bright with intense euphoria and he pulled his war scythe up from the ground and slashed straight up the body of Orion cleaving him in two, the fizzling of burnt flesh disgusted me and the rain of crimson life splashed on all around. Garrus jetted in to the air and flung himself into a fatal combat, he struck the lord at his heart plunging his blade into the chest of the death bringer, only causing but a single wound, and as the engine turned in his blade the internal fluids of the Necron splashed onto Garrus’ body he laid several shots into the Necron lord before being blasted off and ripped in two by the war scythe, the gauss running along the blade gave no form of life a chance of survival not even the prestigious iron halo could save life from this. I stood upto the challenge and with full strength charged at the mortally wounded Lord. I revved up Enigmus and a spark of flames ran through my blade as I struck down the bionic monster, a slim smile grew on my face although no one could see it as I was all that was left. I turned around to exit the battle and as I looked up a raven flew over head.
”AHGGHHHHTTKKKK!!!!!!!!!!!!” the tip of the Lords staff penetrated through my back and out of my chest, pushing my black carapace of the shell of my ribs, I pulled off my helmet and pushed the blade back out. As I turned to face my attacker I coughed up a fountain of blackened blood, and looked into the eyes of my enemy, he had reformed and was standing without even a scratch on his body of living metal. He laughed at me as I fell to my knees and dropped my blade he turned and walked away. My body now crippled from such a deadly attack, I can only hope to be allowed to continue in battle in the mighty fighting sarcophagus dreadnoughts. My mind went blank after that thought struck me and i fell into a lulling sense of solitude, My last sense to go was my hearing and the only sound I could make out was the screeching of the Black Raven overhead, after this my mind fell into darkness………………

As The Raven Breaths. PT 2 Raven Chronicles

I couldn't see, i couldn't feel, i could only listen.

When i awoke after the battle i was different. My body was broken but i still had strength and my faith burned passionately throughout my veins. I opened my eyes but my vision was different. I could see more than before. I turned around and an unnerving cranking of gears make me shudder, i looked down to see myself in a mighty adamantium sarcophagus.

"I am truly blessed by the emperor, to be given the ability to continue fighting against his enemies" I said under my breath.

Chaplain Cornelius walked up to me and stood at my feet, as he looked up at me he smiled and began chanting a prayer. I looked up and down his armour to make sure that my vision was perfect. His armour was adorned with symbols of death, the black power armour was clean and there was a shadowy aura lingering around his body. The aquila on his chest was gleaming white and the lines were perfectly defined on its wings, there was a minor differentiation in his armour though, his left shoulder pad was riddled with holes ranging from about an inch wide to three inches. He finished his prayer and then tapped me on the arm, the metal ring from the tap would become a common sound that i would have to get used to. It was eerie though that i was no longer flesh and blood but a crippled corpse sustained by the power of the adeptus mechanicus.

I had noticed that my sarcophagus was adorned with imagery depicting my previous victories as the assault Captain of the 3rd Company. They were all engraved with a high power laser that left a white stain, my armaments were simple and suited me perfectly, a set of dual power weapons, on each fist was a gripping claw of 4 power blades and in the centre of one rested a melta-gun & the other my prized blade Enigmus. I walked over to the armoury doors and stepped outside onto the cracked floor of Deliverance.

The next few days mainly consisted of me getting back into my routine of prayer and also getting used to my new leviathan body. I was soon after departed on a Campaign to the Barren Death world Al'Khator it was the second moon of Al'Trax Prime in the Hydra Nebula system. The campaign was set out to purge the Xeno species of Tau from there footholding on the desert world. From the data i had been given i analysed the surroundings of the drop zone as it was going to be a Hot Drop. The ground was solid and there was a constant light dust storm writhing across the plains. I stood on the lift into the StarJumper 'Ravens Justice' and waited for the time to come.....

The Raven Breaths once more was a phrase muttered throughout the ship as i stood before my Battle Brothers once more....

As The Raven Strikes PT 3 Raven Chronicles

The rattling of the starship was causing dissarray as we penetrated the asteroid field surrounding Al'Khator. The planets atmosphere was masked with a musky blanket, it was a deep red similar to that of the royal garbs worn by some of the Imperial Senators. There were several heavy flashes from the planets surface that pushed up against the glass of the hull windows, the frost that was gathering around the windows was began to melt away as the Raven's Justice penetrated the Atmosphere. The roaring engines gave a warm hearth to me and my men readying us for battle. I looked around and looked at my Battle-Brothers, they were clad in there black power armour it was cleaned perfectly and there wasn't a hint of battle damage even on the veterans. They wore ancient suits of artificer, it was adorned with the honoured scriptures and teaching of the mighty primarch Corax and there were symbols of life and death lining there weapons. My adamantium Armour had been upgraded for this mission in particular, the Melta-gun had been replaced with a master crafted Heavy flamer, there was a unique pattern flowing across the barrell and the promethium tank was doubled up to give a stronger burst of flame than the standard heavy flamer.

"READY BROTHERS! THE FIGHT IS UPON US!" i Roared as Raven's Justice plummeted towards the surface of Al'Khator, the dust plumed around the ship as it lowered itself lower enough for us to disengage. i looked at my brothers and they pulled there bolters from tehre side and held there bolters with stern faith and there Blades with the wrath of the emperor. I breathed in and stepped off the platform and as the wrest of the company dropped down i felt the euphoria of battle rushing through me. The sheer weight of my new body was pulling me down two or even three times faster than the others. I hit the ground with a terrifying crash, a small tremor rippled through teh ground. Then hole squads at a time screaming there battle cries plummeted to the ground around me, the floor screamed with an overload of weight and then as we readied ourselves a huge pulse of energy pierced the side of hull of Raven's Justice and then an explosion erupted out of the engine and an inferno of promethium rained down across the barren desert.

"GET DOWN!!!!!!!!!!!!!" Screamed Captain Darrius and as he preached his words of wisdom a flaming piece of shrapnel hammered down and sliced straight through his chest, his blood sprayed into the air and the liquid of life was spitting down on us all. The rest if the company bunkered down and once the flame had stopped we all looked around to see what had happened to RJ. The ship was still in orbit but it was slowly falling down to the planet's surface with a trail of molten debris flinging itself from the spine of the cruiser; it disappeared over the horizon and then another beam of crystal blue energy fluxed over the top of the company.

"Bunker up men, we will hold this position until dusk then we will strike there position!" I screamed over the bustle of soldiers. The men all lined up into squads and saluted then they began construction of minor defences. I scanned the horizon for movement and then consulted my digital map for the layout of the local area. There was a nearby institute of buildings cramped in a small complex, the enemies would certainly be gathered here. Upon the fall of darkness the raven would strike when its foe at there weakest......

As The Raven Burns PT 4 Raven Chronicles

The battle field was settling and the dust devils were coming to a halt, the constant sky lights of plasma had stopped aswell. Myself and the company with me had finished making the defences and the moon was brimming over the horizon. The sun was darkening and it was slowly falling, once darkness hit we would strike; The 1st Shadow Company was a time bomb, waiting and watching.
I looked around my monstrous adamantium body and looked at my men readying themselves for night fall. There foxholes made strong and a wall of sandbags dropped off with us was now praying towards the enemy for fire. I was relieved to have one less thing to worry about because the squads were loading there bolters for an assault and several of the squads were cleaning the piping on there flamers. This was going to be a good night.

I was inspected by the mysterious Techmarine Angelus, his servo harness clambering over his artificer covered body like an dwelling spider, he loaded up a storm bolter on my other arm, I was truly ready to slay the enemies of the emperor with my Right fist I would punish the Xeno’s and with my Left I would burn away there sins. He looked up at me and told me everything was fine, the lowly crimson glow in his eyes gave me a strange sense of re-assurance and then he called up his servitors to fit something else onto my sarcophagus. The servitors skinned warped and there mechanical bodies were menacingly efficient. They lumbered themselves over to Angelus and with them they carried a large metal crate. The mechanical arms from Angelus’ Servo harness reached over with perfect accuracy and opened the khaki crate. I gazed down and saw two high power propulsion engines.

”These are a gift from the chapter master, do not worry captain they will not fail with the work of my steady hand and my servitors” Said Angelus in a low musky voice. As he said those words himself and the servitors set to work on upgrading my slow moving dreadnought body into a high powered assault machine. I felt a feeling I had not felt for a long time. Fear. This was not because the assault was imminent I was a veteran of a thousand battles but it was because something else was at heart here. A small Tau outpost could not be a threat to the emperor a darker force was at work on this planet.

”Ready brothers the sun is darkening and our strike is near on my word we move upto the outpost quickly and quietly, Once we reach the walls follow my actions and we will destroy the Xenos scum within” I said to the stern warriors of the 1st Shadow Company.

The sun fell and the men organised themselves with haste and began the assault, we moved up with the complete element of stealth our shadow black armour camouflaging us against the night and the faint red glow from the tactical marines helmets could only instil fear within the enemy. The sand was absorbing the shock and sound of our footsteps as we ran and the wind covering our voices.

We Reached the bullet riddled walls of the Compound and the dust devil had ripped itself up again. This was good, the noise was a soothing stealth for us all. I checked my data map and surveyed the compound with digital imaging.

”Scout 200m north-west captain” Whispered the scout to my right. I turned and looked up at the Tau Pathfinder, he noticed us and just as he went to sound the alarm a silenced bolter shell pierced his skull and upon impact his head shattered and a firework display of blood and flesh hailed down on the outpost roof.

”On my mark we go.. Got it? Im going to break through the wall and then you follow” I said.

The canon of the bolter slides being pulled back gave me a rush of euphoria and as the adrenaline pumped through my veins I pulled back my fist and ripped down the wall charging into the Resting fire warriors barracks, I pulled up my flamer arm and sent out huge jets of Flaming promethium billowing into the room, the screams of melting Xenos was horrifying yet soothing. I turned in a 90 degree angle on the pivot and burned everything from left to right. I repeated the flaming 2 or 3 times. Once the crackling flesh had stopped and nothing in the room came up on the auspex I moved forward through the barracks. The marines followed closely behind me with a faith that could knock back even the most daring warrior. The scout squad pushed against the wall next to the door and the pulled it open and then a volley of plasma bursts screamed out of the door and pierced the thick power armour of several marines, there bodies falling to the ground with an almost dance like motion, they twirled as the energy impacted with them and a line of blood spewed out of there wound. I Readied my storm bolter and Began hailing bolter rounds through the door and walls. The scouts moved back to hold the line with the shadow company and then I moved upto the smoking wall, the cracks and craters made the wall into a pathetic piece of cover. Two Devastators moved up with Heavy bolters and cocked them ready for action.

We moved forward and I ripped the wall open, 7 or 8 marines with flamers moved up in front of me, the constant barrage of the metal boots slamming on the floor gave me a sort of momentary shell shock. Clank Clank Clank. I shook it off though and continued over the floor, every time I stepped a huge indentation broke the ceramic tiles. My trail of destruction was larger now than before a room melted from heavy promethium and the floor scarred with the gargantuan footsteps of my feet. Another set of screams came from a room 50m ahead of me as the marines let loose a daemon of flame into it, the pillowing inferno raged throughout the complex and then silence. The spurs of flame stopped and the sound of pain and agony fell silent with it.

We moved outside into the court yard and looked up onto the roof, the Aerial Denial Node that struck the cruiser was cold and desolate, no one to operate it was left. I sent a small scout squad up to plant demolition charges but as I did so 5 Xv88 battle suits fell, this was my first time fighting these graceful machines as a dreadnought.

”Its time” I said to myself quietly.

I pulsed forward at unimaginable speeds with my new jet propulsion system and as I rammed into the first battle suits my fist tore straight through its chest and killed the fire warrior within, a gooey mess was all that was left of him now. His blood dripping down each individual blade on my fist. Then I turned to my left to a beating from a plasma rifle, its searing heat made me sweat even within this eternal tomb. Several tactical squads were now set on calling for back up and also destroy the A.D.N. The spinning cyclone of plasma bursts rippled out of the burst cannons and cut away 3 marines, unlike before they fell with a heavy weight and the blood sprayed out similar to the slaughter of an animal. I grasped another battle suit on my claws and I lifted him of the ground the electric currents running around the battle suit were electrocuting the Xeno within, I laughed and then twisted my fist and it was followed by a pillar of promethium burning straight through his body. I threw his limb body aside and then i took several more blows from the plasma and burst cannon fire. “ 2 down 3 more to go.

”There set sir!!!” Roared the scout sergeant as he and his squad jumped from the roof. An unnerving explosion shook the floor and the Tau became dazed only for a second but that was enough for my men to take the emperors judgment upon them, streams of precise bolters fire blew away the armour from the battle suits and two more were felled. Then a Single krak missile whistled past me and struck the Shas’O in the chest and with a mighty eruption he fell backwards, victory was that of the 1st Shadow Company. I looked at the A.D.N it was now nothing more than a pile of molten slag.

”what’s our next orders sir?” I sent over the radio.

”You are to move into the nearby city of Darak’Lohck and remove the enemy!” Called back the commander.

I looked down at my arm and noticed the flame was still burning brightly. With the flames of hell blowing out of our flamers day became night and the darkness became sanctuary. The Raven will Burn again after tonight!

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come on no comments? it can't be that bad lol XD

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Very nice, first person can be tricky but I think you've pulled it off. I'm sure you're aware but your spelling could do with a once over.

But a very nice story, you've definitley got the spirit of the Raven Guard down to a tee, silent killers, fast and precise. Much Rep my friend.
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Originally Posted by Mastermime View Post
Very nice, first person can be tricky but I think you've pulled it off. I'm sure you're aware but your spelling could do with a once over.

But a very nice story, you've definitley got the spirit of the Raven Guard down to a tee, silent killers, fast and precise. Much Rep my friend.
aye i get carried away with writing and forget spelling etc. but thanks for the rep
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