Again, standard disclaimers - I pick based on how folks are able to cram a self-contained story within 1,000 words. Setting, conflict, etc. And doing a quick review of each, because I wanna make sure everyone is assured I read their story
This time though, reviews first before ranking.
Adrian - "But the Food!" -
I love the concept and the atmosphere. My only quibble: The ending stinger kinda loss its edge, as it felt a bit unclear who was saying that last line.
Mossy Toes - "To Comprehend (It Matters Not)"
High on concept, but a bit lacking in resolution. It's really begging for further explanation. Why is the narrator clearly mad at the Imperium? Why is he / she trying to convey a feeling of hopelessness?
Jonileth - "Hidden Doom"
Earns marks for being a fully self-contained story. But I can't help but feel that the characterization of the Marines (particularly working with an Eldar) is a bit "off".
Demonlord24 - Pride
Nicely self contained, but I felt you were rushing that ending and trying to cram it within the word count (I know the feeling). Can't help but feel it may be a touch removed from the theme though.
Andygorn - E’en in the broken traitor's breast, hatred’s fires still burn deep and bright
I think you have a real talent for describing GRIMDARK stuff. But the formatting is an issue, and the sudden annihilation of the world felt abrupt.
Gothik - The Gods Know Best
I sadly felt it was too heavy on the exposition and not enough story.
Adrian - The Eyes of the Dead
nice. A nice mix of exposition, showing us actual action of what happens in a plague-filled world, and then a great twist. Gave me the same chills as when I read this line from elsewhere: "We
are the Walking Dead[/i]".
Davidicus40k - As You Command
It feels a bit heavy on the exposition, but it's a nice twist on how to harden an Inquisitor.
Dicrel Seijin - "Only War"
Not bad, as far as "Emperor ressurected" fiction goes, but it feels much more like an intro to a story than a story.
Kaiden - "Shadow of the Hydra"
Good Farseer story. Action, a story, and a twist. My only concern may be the overly long intro, and I felt the second paragraph could have been condensed for much stronger effect while still framing this as a Farseer story. I would argue that sometimes less is more.
Brother Emund - "Annihilation"
It has the real potential of a good action piece, but the flow is a bit confusing, particularly given the formatting oddities.
BlackGuard - "A Burden to Bear"
I'd really hate to say "a bit too much exposition, abrupt end" again, but it seems to be a habit here
KjellThorngaard - "Doom of Many, Doom of One"
Counting individual cells was weird and threw the story off a bit. Otherwise the overall story concept and the mood-setting was brillant
Serpion5 - "To Face Such a Beast"
Argh, Necrons! Other than personal quibble, it's a solid self-contained story. Can't really say if I liked the twist in this one though, as I'm still used to the old unfeeling Necrons.
Dave T Hobbit - "Clear Skies"
Mostly solid story, good twist. But it had problems flowing smoothly, as though we were cutting from scene to scene with little preamble.
So, anyway, my picks:
1st Place: Adrian - The Eyes of the Dead
2nd Place: Kaiden - "Shadow of the Hydra"
3rd Place: KjellThorngaard - "Doom of Many, Doom of One"
Next time can we have a top 5?