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09-10-12 05:37 AM
Ambush Beast
Hi

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Originally Posted by VixusKragov View Post
Very good. It seems like a cliche to say this but the story is hauntingly beautiful. I know I'm just throwing more praise on to the pile at this point, but you've got some serious talent.
Thanks a lot. Your praise is very well received and needed since I have an immense inferiority complex.
09-09-12 07:12 PM
VixusKragov Very good. It seems like a cliche to say this but the story is hauntingly beautiful. I know I'm just throwing more praise on to the pile at this point, but you've got some serious talent.
09-09-12 03:30 PM
Ambush Beast
Hello

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Originally Posted by maelstrom48 View Post
First original work I've read on here, and I have to say, I'm encouraged! You have a talent for description. I actually liked how you alternated between the old man's emotion and the events that caused it. The ending leaves me a little uncertain--did the events of the story actually take place? If so, how did he end up in the hospital? But I feel maybe it makes more sense that he murdered his daughter and, in his ensuing coma, dreamed up the purgatory he's trapped in. Not sure; some clarity would be nice. All the same, I again admire your description of his emotional state throughout.
Thanks for reading and commenting. The story's end was meant to keep the reader guessing somewhat. But here's the skinny on the matter. Though the man was in a coma his mind was not. He had indeed received the culmination of the pact in his mind, but not in body. Spirit and flesh as it were. His spirit is stuck for all eternity while his flesh wastes away and will soon be forgotten. Be careful what you wish for.
09-07-12 11:48 AM
Dave T Hobbit I think the ending works better without confirmation of whether he is mad or not.
09-07-12 02:32 AM
maelstrom48 First original work I've read on here, and I have to say, I'm encouraged! You have a talent for description. I actually liked how you alternated between the old man's emotion and the events that caused it. The ending leaves me a little uncertain--did the events of the story actually take place? If so, how did he end up in the hospital? But I feel maybe it makes more sense that he murdered his daughter and, in his ensuing coma, dreamed up the purgatory he's trapped in. Not sure; some clarity would be nice. All the same, I again admire your description of his emotional state throughout.
09-06-12 11:56 PM
Ambush Beast
I was rummaging

through my old stuff and found this. Hope you like it. From the archives.
01-17-12 09:47 AM
Pusser Chills down my spine...
01-17-12 09:39 AM
gothik
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Do not fear minion, my omnipresent eye is always scanning this section... When it feels like it.
thats actually quite creepy TAG really creepy
01-17-12 04:11 AM
Ambush Beast
lol

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Do not fear minion, my omnipresent eye is always scanning this section... When it feels like it.
lol.
01-17-12 02:03 AM
ThatOtherGuy
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It always feels good to know you are there keeping vigil over O.W. and the minions scurrying about in the darkness within. Smile, smile.
Do not fear minion, my omnipresent eye is always scanning this section... When it feels like it.
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