Hmm, the fluff I cannot fairly criticise as i'm not an expert, However I like it and give it a good thumbs up!
The Scheme, I can only say Intresting, split schemes are one of those things that can only go one of two ways, Very right, or very wrong, I'd have to see it on a figure (IRL),
I've not seen a scheme that use's a different 'Face' colour to helmet done right, However this looks like it might work well, again would have see a real life figure.
Look forward to it! Be sure to let me know if this develops into more,
O Caido é o senhor das guerras,
O Caido é o senhor das demandas,
quando O Caido chega
é O Caido quem manda