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Help please :)

Im going to be writing a story based on the life of a single guardsmen, he will be the best shot etc so hes going to advance in the ranks but i wont be writing about his actual training for fear of getting it wrong. I will be writing from the day they graduate and go to battle.

He will be Private Leon Valentine, its a 1st person story.

I need help with the name though

what would you guys suggest????
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I like the premise of the story. I'd keep the name too but maybe spell it different somehow. Maybe "Valentyn".
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I like the premise of the story. I'd keep the name too but maybe spell it different somehow. Maybe "Valentyn".
Ok What about the name of the story?

I was thinking maybe Ghosts Of Cadia although thats poor.

The Killing Fields?

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My Bloody Valentine?

Seriously though, choose a defining moment from your story, a quote from one of the characters or even foreshadow (not give away) the ending.

E.g. If in the storay a Comissar says 'You fight or you die!', then you can call the story - 'Fight or Die' or if the final objective is to secure some sacred stones, call it 'Stone Dead' - a couple of fairly poor examples but you get the idea.
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My Bloody Valentine?

Seriously though, choose a defining moment from your story, a quote from one of the characters or even foreshadow (not give away) the ending.

E.g. If in the storay a Comissar says 'You fight or you die!', then you can call the story - 'Fight or Die' or if the final objective is to secure some sacred stones, call it 'Stone Dead' - a couple of fairly poor examples but you get the idea.
Oh rite ok well iwas going to have one of the generals tell the private welcome to the killing fields? so thats were i go the killing fields from.
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If you're going for the Killing Fields, why not just call it Apocalyse Now or Platoon?

Again, just think about what your story is about - revenge, regret, the horrors of war, triumph from disaster, etc. and derive the title from that. Obviously, the Oscar winning movie, the Killing Fields probably won't exist in the 41st Century, so it's applicable that your General would say that. Unfortunately, the readers do live in this century and they'll just say 'Hardly an original title'.

If you really want to stick on the Killing Fields idea, change it to something else like 'The Stomping Ground' or 'The Grinder' or ' The Devil's Playground'. None of my suggestions are original but they are a little more obscure then 'The Killing Fields'.

A quick and easy solution might be to do some research into military history and steal a name from past conflicts, it will have that ring of authenticity but will be obscure enough that everyone will think you made it up.

Please understand that I'm not having a pop, just trying to be helpful.
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If you're going for the Killing Fields, why not just call it Apocalyse Now or Platoon?

Again, just think about what your story is about - revenge, regret, the horrors of war, triumph from disaster, etc. and derive the title from that. Obviously, the Oscar winning movie, the Killing Fields probably won't exist in the 41st Century, so it's applicable that your General would say that. Unfortunately, the readers do live in this century and they'll just say 'Hardly an original title'.

If you really want to stick on the Killing Fields idea, change it to something else like 'The Stomping Ground' or 'The Grinder' or ' The Devil's Playground'. None of my suggestions are original but they are a little more obscure then 'The Killing Fields'.

A quick and easy solution might be to do some research into military history and steal a name from past conflicts, it will have that ring of authenticity but will be obscure enough that everyone will think you made it up.

Please understand that I'm not having a pop, just trying to be helpful.
No thats fine Ermm Meat For The Grinder lol nah am joking

The Ghosts Of Cadia?

The Masters Of War?

The Dead Of War?

Vanquish Thine Enemy?

Suppression of war?

The Casaulty Of Truth?
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I like 'The Dead of War', sounds good and carries gravitas.
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I like 'The Dead of War', sounds good and carries gravitas.
ok thank you, also what about


The KIlling Grounds rather than the killing fields.

The death of war orthe dead of war?
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The Dead of War or the Killing Grounds are both good. Choose whichever title will work best with your narrative.

The Death of War sounds like the war has ended and if the galactic conflict ever ends, Games Workshop will go bankrupt, so support the war effort.
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