Yup--since each Terminator takes up 2 transport slots, you can only transport 5 Termis per Land Raider, unfortunately.
You'll also need to drop one of the Berzerkers from two of the squads to fit in the independent characters you have, there, unless you want them all on their own outside of a vehicle--a rather silly way to deploy them.
Raptors are rather more versatile than Warp Talons, seeing as they can still beat up marines in comat (getting the charge+HoW+probably MoK attack), but can also buy special weapons like, say, meltaguns. Another point to consider is that everything Raptors do, Bikers do even better, for very nearly the same cost. A unit of 8 or so bikers would be much better than a unit of 10 raptors: they get +1T, twin-linked bolters that (thanks to Relentless) they can still fire and charge, they can go flat out to travel up to 24" in a turn, they ignore cover for the save of moving and charging (well, they still take dangerous terrain tests, but those are almost laughable these days)...etc.
I don't know Zhufor's stats, but is he better than the quite cheap and incredibly deadly option of a Lord with the Axe of Blind Fury (and the MoK, a SoC, and perhaps a bike/jump pack if you want him in that unit)?
Finally, I'd go for 2 Predators with autocannon turrets and either lascannon or heavy bolter sponsons (probably lascannon, to get a bit more anti-tank into the list).
The biggest real problem this army has is its total lack of anti-air. I'd suggest a (lovely, wonderful) Heldrake or something to help counteract that...
What sphinx of plascrete and adamantium bashed open their skulls and ate up their brains and imagination? Imperator! Imperator!
Last edited by Mossy Toes; 02-26-13 at 04:54 PM.