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post #8 of (permalink) Old 12-08-10, 04:20 PM Thread Starter
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Originally Posted by ThatOtherGuy View Post
Ok, so as you have asked, here is a little criticism that I have with this part.

I understood the plot of this little cut and I am deeply interested. Good job and keep at it. Don't worry about this critique, for I too fall for these mistakes once in a while.
Thanks for the comment! I will try to avoid to many mistakes like that in the next one...

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