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post #7 of (permalink) Old 12-08-10, 12:17 AM
ThatOtherGuy
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Ok, so as you have asked, here is a little criticism that I have with this part.


I understood the plot of this little cut and I am deeply interested. Good job and keep at it. Don't worry about this critique, for I too fall for these mistakes once in a while.

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