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Mossy Toes
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An enjoyable story, to be sure. The fanatical mindset of the Sororitas is always fun to immerse oneself in: in fact, my own story will include them too, when I'm done with it.

One complaint that I have is that it all seems like it's in one short period of time. There's no way to tell that she's been traveling to different planets during her memories, and it seems to imply that a much shorter period of time has passed--or that she's lapsed into dreams, like a dreadnought, only to surface when there's a fight.

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What sphinx of plascrete and adamantium bashed open their skulls and ate up their brains and imagination? Imperator! Imperator!
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