Great short story mate, have you ever read Matthew Riley, he writes alot like that.
Not much description (But still enough there to make it visualizable.) and heaps of action.
Great story, you've really captured what a Commissar does.
I'm a major fan of Winston Churchill and Walter Tompson (his bodyguard.) So that is why my avatar is of Winson and Walter. No I'm not wierd, I'm not stupid, I'm just Snowy.
