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post #2 of (permalink) Old 01-30-10, 03:49 PM
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Well the format is correct and the pacing is adequate...

But it barely entertained me...

Don't know why though?... Maybe because it had no substance... Such as a detailed description of their surroundings, a brief description of the terror that they are facing, dialogues that show a glimpse of who the characters really are and maybe also the minimal amount of gore...

Well that's my opinion...

Expecting you reaction mate...

Cheers!...

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