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post #3 of (permalink) Old 08-06-09, 02:47 PM
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It was good... But can you divide your future works into paragraphs?... It really is hard for us readers to scan through a work of this kind... Make no mistake, I like it... It's just because this simple thing tends to keep readers from scanning and enjoying a work that's been created from the sweat and brow of a young and enthusiastic author... Kudos for such a unique fluff (because it's about an Eldar) and I expect more of your works in the future... Oh and uhmmm... Rep+...
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