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post #5 of (permalink) Old 12-01-08, 03:41 AM
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Dude... This is just a critique... Don't take this personally... Ok?.... The whole thing was confusing... You should've made it clearer as to who was who... Like who was the one running and who was the one chasing... And when you post a teaser or the prologue of your story... It should be thrilling and exciting and really get the readers to desire the continuation of your story... I like your concept... It just needs a little refinement... Good luck with your story... Hehehehe...
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