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post #3 of (permalink) Old 10-17-16, 05:19 PM
Dave T Hobbit
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Try showing evidence of things rather than telling the reader. For example, instead of narrating that the innkeeper's wife always treated the soldiers as she would any other customer, show how she treats a regular, show people being annoyed at the guards, and then show her treating the guards the same way she treats the regular.
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