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Myen'Tal
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3 pts, An Unusual Canvas, Honorableman
2 pts, All Is Not What It Seems, Brother Edmund
1 pts, Poetry in Motion, Brother Edmund

Honorableman: I like your take on the theme this month, definitely a more sinister turn than your usual stuff. I can feel the insanity radiating off this main character. Probably a devotee of Slaneesh, perhaps? It's a little weird, because I feel that all of our stories took a somewhat grimmer, grittier turn than what we usually write, and lacks some of the valor and heroics that accompanies them. But I think that makes for a more interesting contest.

Brother Edmund: Good stories, and compliments on getting two entries in this month. It's a lot of head-scratching and working on the drawing board when working on multiple stories, isn't it? I actually like your second piece more than the first one about your renegade, Morten Stroms. I think it's because of how you portray the hidden cunning of the Orks, and their promise of inevitable brutality to show that the war is far from over.

Now I have read your story about Morten Stroms, and enjoyed it a lot, but your short story about him did not really scream "art" to me. I get what you were going for, but I think your second piece overall carried the theme more strongly.

Good job from both you!

“Evil is relative…You can’t hang a sign on it. You can’t touch it or taste it or cut it with a sword. Evil depends on where you are standing, pointing your indicting finger.”
-Glen Cook, The Black Company


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Gods' Hall (Completed)
https://www.heresy-online.net/forums/...d.php?t=161618

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https://www.heresy-online.net/forums/...d.php?t=121879
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