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post #15 of (permalink) Old 08-11-15, 10:57 PM
Captain_Loken
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Quite entertaining. Some minor details that I would change.

The biggest one that I notice is that a trained soldier would never call a magazine a 'clip', so just be careful of your wording.

Other than that, it was a really fun read! Keep it up!


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