Only just seen your post KingAlle, it looks goof save for the following things:
You will need to wear a helmet especially if you end up on a space hulk and other hostile environments.
Your elk hide will compromise your stealth capabilities of your armour as it doesnt have the armour itself has when its repainted black.
Thats all i can think of for now. and welcome to Heresy
It probably took a while to show up due to me being a new member.
Helmet - I'm sure I can compromise on the helmet, especially if we're entering Space Hulks and the like.
Cloak - As my character description points out, Valfar rushes his foes and doesn't really know the meaning of stealth or subtlety.