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post #2 of (permalink) Old 10-18-13, 02:32 AM
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Gives an interesting start, bit of a cliffhanger. Also leaves me wanting to know more about the dwarven captives; find out if, and why, they'd be good for ransom.

Your descriptions were done well too; picturing the captors took no effort thanks to your details.

There were a few minor spelling/grammar errors, little things like the "His arms and felt stiff" which is probably just a missing word or something like that. Just little things though.

Looking forward to seeing more parts of the story!

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