First original work I've read on here, and I have to say, I'm encouraged! You have a talent for description. I actually liked how you alternated between the old man's emotion and the events that caused it. The ending leaves me a little uncertain--did the events of the story actually take place? If so, how did he end up in the hospital? But I feel maybe it makes more sense that he murdered his daughter and, in his ensuing coma, dreamed up the purgatory he's trapped in. Not sure; some clarity would be nice. All the same, I again admire your description of his emotional state throughout.