I'm an English Teacher. Yes I'm sure.
Dīnadan, this is one of the best stories that I have read from you. You seem to grow with each one you write.
I was able to follow along with it real well, however, I do agree with Todeswind, the paragraphs were a little to long. Break them up a bit more for those of us who have undeveloped lungs as many of us read open-mouthed exhaling as we take in every word posted before us.
Keep working and enjoying what you do. Glad you started posting, as you are very talented.
I have dyslexia, but did not know it until I was much older. My glasses fix the problem, mostly. That said, English teachers suck! LOL. I aRe Juste Kidingg, TodesWinD.!,?
You guys are just fine and very needed. Good to see you are around too.